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critique plz? by SoberDOGS critique plz? by SoberDOGS
sorry for shitty quality haha
I wanna finish this in SAI but I want some critiques before I do please???
I was going for a trot
Thank you!
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:iconneoyojik:
Hi! Animation is great. Front legs and paws are perfect.
There is a bit of trouble with rear legs.
First of all it looks as if it hurts steppign on them. Maybe, you could make paws a wee bit bigger to make them softly stomp as front?
Secondly, shape of thighs is like that of a human. Even very fuzzy dogs don't have streight tights. There should be cavity on rear side just above thickest part of leg. And skin on this cavity holds strong so it doesn't stretch all the way from bum to knee.
Hopefully, I managed explain clearly.
It's nice stuff so you don't really have to improve it.
What do you think?
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I really appreciate the fluidity of this. It moves through and loops wonderfully. On another note, I would like to disagree with NeoYojik. The movement and contact points adds a sense of weight for the viewer. Having a distinct style is also a great thing to have if you ever plan on submitting a reel to anyone or even a portfolio, it'll make you stand out and will show in better detail your evolution as an artist.

However, I think this piece can benefit from more movement of the neck and head, the rest of the body is constantly movement but the head and neck comes off as stiff, usually with canines there is at least a little head movement. But, if it is a small dog they can have little head movement, the bigger the canine, the bigger the movement though. This goes for all animals. The size can easily be better determined if a background is added.

I hope to see the finished project. This is a very stylized and lovely trot cycle so far.
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:iconflufffromhelloriginl:
I know nothing about art. I don't like the critique I had made. vuv
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Reddemon1996 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
the body needs alittle more body movement same for the head. it seems alittle stiff without that but otherwise its nice.
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littaly Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Hmmmm. If you want critique, the upper body is too stiff. You've got great movement in the legs, but the rest just doesn't seem to follow right. Like, thee tire body moves "upwards" right at the same point altogether, but I think the hips should bump slightly as the back leg lifts off the ground? Sorry I'm bad at critique XD and I think you should give the neck and hair some more natural movement as well
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ahh thank you vwv
I havent looked at this trot cycle in a while hmm
I really should finish it ;w;
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littaly Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Lol whoops I didn't even look at the date XD I was just browsing through your animations folder.
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
LOL that's alright. I do want to revist this some time soon.
my animations folder isnt much xD I wish I had more real animations to put in it vmv
I'm thinking of doing simple gif animation commissions soon. Like run cycles and such.
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littaly Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Haha guess I reminded you then!

Same, most of my finished animations are on YouTube because of dA's copyright laws with music and such though there's nothing I'm really proud of anymore haha

And that would be cool, people like animations XD I would do that too but if just put too much effort into it and either get bored or run out of time ^^; so for animations I stick to the little icons and loops I've already done
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yeahh i'd probably do the same ;w; but i'd make them really expensive xD
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littaly Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Haha yeah me too XD like, 500 :points: is only about $5 soooo. Yeah expensive
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
id probably start them off at 1000 and if they get popular I'd raise them to 1500 vwv
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Featerstar Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
ohmigosh i love dis XD
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lupisvulpes Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow! This is fantastic :'D it's so smooth and cute ^^ <3
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thankyouuu<33
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lupisvulpes Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
np <33
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Areographic Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
This is quite amazing only thing i have add, since i haven't seen anyone comment on it yet, is make the body a little longer cause to me, with such long legs they actually should be hitting each other. Other than that this is fantastic!! <3
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ahh I have to agree with you there. Thank you! I wouldnt have noticed if you didnt point it out vwv
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Wulfwall Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'd try slowing it down just a tad. Other than that it is great! :iconchuuplz:
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BlizardWolf Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't see anything wrong with it :3 The animation is smoth and the legs move the same way i wolves would, you even got the bounce affect
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This isn't a wolf.
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BlizardWolf Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i know but most canines move the same way, im not sure which type he is so i just said wolf
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:/
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BlizardWolf Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
what?
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fritz532 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012   Photographer
I'm gonna write a tiny critique in a comment right here~

Overall, this is awesome!!
I love how smooth it is, it's very well animated in general, hahah!
I would recommend making the head move just a little.
Like, not have it stay in the same place so much. U//o//U;;
That's pretty much all i have to say, hahaha!
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! Ill work on it :3
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DesmondeKapi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is so perfect :U
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thankss
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KristinaStoud Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
i think you've already received all the critique you need on this, so i'll just say, keep up the great work ^u^
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you ;w;
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KristinaStoud Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
very welcome~ c:
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ne0nEclipse Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
amazing
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thankk
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Gypsyinator Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It looks perfect :D
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks :3
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Gypsyinator Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :D
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STEAMGH0ST Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is perfect omg
but
i guess the head and hair should move a bit more, like up and down? and i think his left arm should move a bit more back and forth sorta if you know what i mean ;u;"
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you I will fix :3
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muukai Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
    it's so sexy omg
    all you need to do is add more movement with the head and hair.
    but it's sexy no matter what
    i wish i could animate like chu
    //sobin2 sun
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thankyouuuuyyuy
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Gee-Wolf Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012   Digital Artist
Looks great to me! :)
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks!
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ButterWolf Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It's great! Just make the hair flop when he bounces. ^^ It's amazing!!
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
alright :3
thank you!
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ButterWolf Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Welcome. :jackdirt:
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creepedoutwoodplz Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
....You know the rabbits are mating, right? :I
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ButterWolf Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Yes I do. Nice icon BTW. ^^
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creepedoutwoodplz Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Oh.... Thanks ;=;
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ButterWolf Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Welcome.
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sheep1sh Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
PERFECT
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
;w;
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DrunkDOGS Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
like wolven walker said, it needs more head movement,
maybe his head swaying side to side so it give off that I GOT SWAG feel
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